Feedback's always cool, by the way, guys. If you hated it, BE SPECIFIC. I'm kind of entering a brave new world here, so I really don't know what to expect. This is definitely a learning experience for me and I think that what I really need at this stage in my growth as a writer is to have my work out there for the people to see and read and comment on. It alters my whole mindset to know that every word and every sentence is now coming under scrutiny from people who have no emotional attachment whatsoever to the story.