Man, I can't write anything close to this in all of the three languages that I speak. I am really jealous of you. I swear, if I was able to write like you do, I would write at least a page everyday.
How much time did it take you to write this? Do you read a lot of literature on your own or is this considered average for students where you live?
I wrote it in maybe 25 minutes, proofread it twice. I was educated in California, so you can figure out what's average for here or not. I haven't really stretched my writing hand in a long time, so I'm going to start warming up every day or so. I've had the outline for a young adult fiction written up for a long time and I want to at least get a draft out.
there's like an entire cocktail bar's worth of mixed metaphors in just the first paragraph
I didn't realize until you pointed out how excessive those are. I don't know, I just like to describe things with relation rather than literal terms. It brings more emotion to lifeless things, I suppose?